Explanation writing and plan

Why people need to drink water:

People need to drink water so they can stay hydrated and survive, Sometimes drinking water can improve your health by cleansing out your system and helping you avoid getting different types of cancer.Sometimes it can be just to energise yourself just like athletes you see All athletes drink water to energise their bodies so they can keep going they sometimes don’t do it for themselves they do it for there country because they represent and work hard for country and water helps them carry on by energise them so they never stop trying.

Drinking water can save your life,keep you healthy,and help you keep energised.Lots of good things happen to your bodies system and health just by drinking water,lots of people have improved their health just by drinking water it gives you muscles and keeps your  skin  nice ,soft and beautiful. If you drink water your heart,brain,lungs and kidney all stay healthy and clean drinking water has a lot of benefits

show not tell

Show not tell ...

I felt angry.

It was morning as usual my brother and sister ,hitting me breaking my stuff smashing   a piece of wood across my head ,my fist clenching, my blood pumping,

My heart beating faster and faster my face as red as blood my teeth grinding like razor blades ,my nostrils flaring

It was a sunny day.

i  felt the splash of sunshine across my face as i was lying in a meadow of daffodils.I hear the sounds of birds chirping,trees swaying.this could be the perfect day.

Cross Country (remember show not tell)

It was a blazing flarring day everyone needing sunscreen,people sweating ,it was so hot everyone waiting for their  turn to run the cross country you could see the heat wave splash across the field burning our skin as if  we were right next to the sun.as we ran it felt like that  yet we keep going it can’t be the end to a story we just started that day this story was called cross country like never seen before

Before you complete this checklist stop and think have you edited your work properly first?

Ask yourself the following questions…                                  

Is my paragraph about one key idea (usually in the first sentence) and then supported by more detail in the next sentences.	Yes
Does my paragraph have more than one sentence? (2 – 3 sentences is probably best)	Yes
Do my sentences have a variety of beginnings?	Yes
Are the sentences connected and do they build up the KEY idea (the topic)?	Yes
Have I carefully chosen words that are appropriate or right for the KEY idea and the purpose?	Yes
Do my sentences ‘appeal’ to my audience?	yes
Are some of my sentences varied? ie. in length or in detail	yes
Have I used a different types of sentences: statements (.)/ questions (?)/ exclamations (!)/ speech (“ “)	yes

Gabrielle and saia sillicon valley blog

Gabrielle and Saia returns from there trip and shows us a video of there trip and where they went to
like these places on this slide




these places sound like fun
you can also watch the movie escape from alcatraz to find out how the three prisoners escaped from the prison alcatraz my personal favourite place
here is the link for the movie  http://putlocker.is/watch-escape-from-alcatraz-online-free-putlocker.html

you can watch it if you like it could be really interesting
be the next to find out how the prisoners escaped today
and in the comments tell me what place you would like to go to

We are the champions

Have a healthy body athletes this is a presentation of my work i have done for a healthy body

We are the champions

Have a healthy body athletes this is a presentation of my work i have done for a healthy body

This is my tops reading work it is really easy and fun to use in writing and ready
WALT: put sentences into there orientation problem title and solution

New Blog

I have a blog of my own.